Mini-Lesson+on+Revising


 * Enduring Understanding:** To get and keep other people's attention, our work has to be honest, personal, and correct.
 * Essential Question:** What makes people value your voice online?

Recently we saw how to use the Correct spelling button, and we made a couple of other simple corrections. Now, let's work on that first long sentence together. (While saying this I'll do the spell-check again, and capitalize a couple of things, and get rid of the heading, "Focused Sentence." Then I'll ask:) How many sentences do you see here? How many are there really? Let's see if we can break this up a bit so that it's easier for our readers -- and so they don't just go to the next post because they don't like the this student didn't pay more attention to sentence structure. //I remember in 2nd grade I had fought my old old Bestfriend Megan Booker we were both Gemini people use to say Gemini and Gemini doesnt get along that well.// Corrected, this will look something like: //I remember in second grade I had a fight with my old, old best friend, Megan. We are both Gemini, and people used to say that Gemini and Gemini don't get along that well.//
 * Starter for Revision Mini-Lesson** (10 min. - Handout)
 * Mini-Lesson:** (15 min.)


 * Guided Practice:** (30 min.)

Now do this yourself with a piece of your own writing. (Students know how to use Google Docs to find a freewrite and to edit it. I'll need to show them how to publish it, but I think this is best to do one-on-one.)

Please circle the one freewrite from the top of the [|Weekly Check-Off] that you want to get ready to post today. Follow the directions on the Weekly Check-Off at steps ONE, TWO, SEVEN, and EIGHT.


 * Share:** (5 min.)

Let's take a look at the blog posts by students in this class on the Personal Learning Space. Congratulations!


 * Independent Practice:**

Your Profile! Did you finish your 50 Likes and 50 Dislikes? These need to be typed into your profile box. "Who am I?" also... and anything else on the list of 7 freewrites -- paper if necessary. You need to publish seven documents before next Friday.

If you want more help, please come here at lunch time -- or in the afternoons on Monday, Tuesday or Friday.